esaciar 1 Posted July 4, 2012 Now, before you all berate me, I've written some fan fiction. I've steered away (in my humble opinion) from the kind of stuff people explicitly said they would not want to see by listening to feedback as I planned this.I've written a chapter, but I have this entire story planned out and can produce more should there be interest.Just wanted to elicit some feedback on what I've managed to construct so far and ascertain whether or not this has legs.Cheers in advance.The link below is a PDF of the cover and first chapter.DayZ : Forsaken (Chapter One) Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
halo.2@hotmail.co.uk 2 Posted July 5, 2012 Im eager to read your chapter, but the site requires a sign-up to access.Im not that eager. Scribd please. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
DemonGroover 8836 Posted July 5, 2012 Anyway of viewing this without needing to sign up? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
esaciar 1 Posted July 5, 2012 Sorry guys, thought it would be instantly public...I'll try to get that sorted. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
KWilt 157 Posted July 5, 2012 Huh. Looks like you need to verify your account.I was going to do a bit of writing in journal form for a group of survivors, but all of my buddies bailed on me. I was going to also incorporate 'radio signals' to the group that allowed people to pry into the personal pasts of said survivors. Was an interesting prospect, in my eyes, but writing about one single character is pretty boring. It's nicer to see things like the syntax between conflicting characters. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
esaciar 1 Posted July 5, 2012 That should work now...?? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
KWilt 157 Posted July 5, 2012 Yep. It's working. Will return with my thoughts in a few.Ciao for now.Aaaaand I'm back.Short read, that's for sure. But it's the first chapter.It didn't exactly hook me from the beginning, but as the exposition, such as the elaborate description of the plane and the beach outside of Balota, drove on, I found myself enjoying it. Can't wait to see what's in store for Pavel. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
DemonGroover 8836 Posted July 5, 2012 Very good indeed - definitely keep going.One word though - Pavel started with a watch!! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
esaciar 1 Posted July 5, 2012 Cheers for feedback thus far. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kophka 109 Posted July 5, 2012 Neat start man, I'm looking forward to reading the rest of it. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
White Vodka 0 Posted July 5, 2012 Loved it. Would read the whole thing! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
esaciar 1 Posted July 6, 2012 Excellent. I'm currently finished chapter two and working on a third now. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
esaciar 1 Posted July 7, 2012 Hoping to upload new chapters by the Lord's Sabbath day... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
KWilt 157 Posted July 10, 2012 Hey, esaciar, any new update on chapter 2? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
