pale1776 375 Posted February 28, 2014 My name is Jesse. But my callsign is, or rather was, Ghost. Before the outbreak, I was a decorated SEAL Sniper. I did 3 tours in Syria, one in the Czech Republic, and spent two years in Russia during World War Three. My best friend, Lennox (Callsign Wolf) was a Designated Marksman in the Army Rangers, and I ended up dragging him along as my spotter during WWIII. Our friend Logan was a civilian pilot contracted with Blackwater.When I first saw news of the infection, I immediately called the two and got our entire families over to my house. I had 150 acres of land on a farm, and a modest sized home, so space was not an issue. Neither was food, as between the 23 people we had with us we all had a basement full of food we stockpiled for the past 6 years. We hunkered down and waited.13 days in, a Littlebird landed in the yard. It was my old Captain, Morris. Intelligence had discovered that the virus was manmade, but more importantly, who made it. The son of a Soviet scientist, Josef Vladimir was wanted worldwide for previous crimes against humanity. Me and Nathan were being recalled for one last mission: Kill Vladimir at any cost. We didnt want to, we had killed enough men in our time. But we were bribed, with a cure. We didnt want anymore people to die. So we accepted, under one condition: That we bring Logan with us.So off we went, a ragtag group of former soldiers sent to a country that they remembered from their childhood had been of world attention during their civil war... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
JimTheNinja 2 Posted February 28, 2014 I like it but its a bit to "I'm a sniper and so is my friend and were going to save the world" In my *OPINION* I like it better with some guys who are scared to death, adds suspense. It is good however. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
pale1776 375 Posted February 28, 2014 Its.the beginning, and SPOILER were rired of all the killing SPOILERENDPlus my career goal is actually SEAL Sniper, and he wants.to be a marksman. Our buddy wants to go to pilot school so he can get the 80000ish a year salary from BWI. So, I figured I may as well base it on our goals. Just you wait... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
pale1776 375 Posted February 28, 2014 Thanks for youe input though, yalls inputbis gonna be a deciding factor In the future.sections (I.E, what you want to see, similiar to a choose your own adventure book.) Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Mullraugh 1151 Posted February 28, 2014 Funny that Logan is a civilian pilot... yet works for Blackwater. Does that make him a Private Military Civilian? haha Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Dreypa 98 Posted February 28, 2014 To be honest ; its not very creative or a story at all. Its mainly you just saying one line sentences about yourselves.How can someone be a civilian and work for blackwater (their a private military contractors ; aka mercenaries). Which leaves a rather large un-thoughtout loophole in your story. If you want to make a background story for your characters. Add some depth ; something people can relate to that makes your characters feel human and authentic. Not trying to be rude ; just my 2 cents. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
pilgrim* 3514 Posted February 28, 2014 NO! My father was in league with his rich, cynical friends in the corrupt mafia-state government. They developed the virus. I stole the antivirus and escaped. They put out false information that I was the criminal. Hunted like a dog, with a price on my head and hit squads from a dozen countries closing in, I hid the antidote. It is my last hope of safety - if I die the cure is lost and the world dies with me. Don't shoot! You mad kill-crazed macho squareheads, you are as bad as each other, you are as bad as the governments that lie to you. Your guns cannot save humanity - I can.Josef Vladimir xx Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Nicko2580 398 Posted February 28, 2014 To be honest ; its not very creative or a story at all. Its mainly you just saying one line sentences about yourselves.How can someone be a civilian and work for blackwater (their a private military contractors ; aka mercenaries). Which leaves a rather large un-thoughtout loophole in your story. If you want to make a background story for your characters. Add some depth ; something people can relate to that makes your characters feel human and authentic. Not trying to be rude ; just my 2 cents.This is why when I wrote my DayZ diary from the perspective of my survivor, I had him wash up on the shores of Chernarus with no memory of what had happened and a very sore head. That way, the story writes itself through his actions and I can slowly reintroduce his memories as he travels and his amnesia fades. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
pale1776 375 Posted February 28, 2014 Blackwater isnt military. Theyre civvies, not soldiers. And theyre "security" officially but still.mercs. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
pale1776 375 Posted February 28, 2014 Xd love oilgrim, no homo.though Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Dreypa 98 Posted February 28, 2014 Blackwater isnt military. Theyre civvies, not soldiers. And theyre "security" officially but still.mercs. Sorry but your wrong; they are a private military contractor organization. I have 2 family members who are ex-blackwaters. Mercenaries =/= civilians. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
