DayZ: Welcome to Chernarus. An Amateur Story

[IKnowAGhost 2]

Please be aware that this is a work in progress and I have NEVER written a story before about anything (besides when I was back in school, aha!) So please, constructive criticism only.

I will update the story once I finish each part so please, be patient.

If you like it, please let me know, I'd love to get some feedback and pointers from other writers.

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Day 0: The Outbreak

My name is Ryan Foley and this is my story.

Nine hours since the outbreak hit the post-soviet state of Chernarus. The sounds of ambient life and bustling city life

had been replaced by nothing but blood curdling screams in the distance and the constant riddling of gunfire.

The Chernarussian army are attempting to eradicate the infection by all means neccesary,

missile strikes have been inbound over the past few hours, the occasional rumbling of a carpet bomb shakes the earth beneath us.

The disease had spread to every country across the globe in a matter of hours, nobody knows what it is

or how it got here. But what we do know is, it isn't human.

I met up with a few other survivors of the Elektrozavodsk evacuation.

So far, we haven't spoken very much, I don't even know anybody's name yet.

We stick to the outskirts and the woodlands and try to keep a low profile.

Myself and the others all seem to have accepted it.

This is our excinction event.

The Chernarussian army will fall to the epidemic and we know it. The infected are too fast, too strong

and extremely unpredictable. I imagine that all around the globe it won't be any different so for now,

we just have to wait it out and try to make it through the night.

After travelling up north with most of the daylight that we had, we travelled slowly and carefully, picking up whatever supplies we could along the way.

During the walk up to the camp we had set up nearby Mogilevka, we got to know one another, there were 5 of us, including me.

We are lead by one of the locals, a hunter, Mikael.

He's constantly on edge, carries a machete soaked in blood with a hunting rifle slung over his back.

He hasn't sheathed that thing since I met him, it makes us all feel uneasy, but he's kept the group safe and knows the area.

We need him.

Without Mikael I wouldn't be here right now, one of the infected had managed to pin me down to the ground, it took every ounce of strength within me to keep

the damn thing from ripping my throat out. They just don't quit. They don't get winded, they don't feel pain, remorse, pity, fear, nothing. A lifeless shell,

hellbent on one thing, slaughtering the living.

Just as I was on my last leg, ready to give up, the walking corpse was dragged back away from me by this monster of a man.

With his huge boots embedded into the things chest, one swift swing of his machete was all it took to put it down.

"Th- thank you. I thought for sure I was dead." I stuttered, gasping for my breath.

"Why you here, Englishman?" Mikael's voice sent a shiver down your spine, he was not the kind of man you wanted to mess with.

"I was here to see a friend, came over to take a break from work and spend some time with him."

"Vacation huh? Ha. Well, my friend. Welcome to Chernarus."

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Day 1: New Beginnings

At camp it was quiet, Mikael had set up a fire and a tent he had in his backpack. Myself, Mikael and Jonah, another survivor in our group kept watch whilst Rachel and her daughter Tasha got some sleep. Jonah was a pretty quiet guy, kept to himself most of the time. But he was smart and centered. Still managed to keep his composure after all of this.

Rachel was a wonderful girl, great personality and unbelievably gorgeous. Her daughter takes after her, sweet little angel, wouldn't hurt a fly. Her father, Adam, was with us during the evacuation, but he was dragged away by one of the infected, right out of his wife's hands. Ripped apart infront of his own daughter.

We tried to save him, but the infected overwhelmed us, there were far too many, half of the city were shambling corpses. We're all that they have now and I'll die before I let anything happen to them.

Myself and Jonah ended up falling asleep rested against some logs, but not Mikael.

He was up all night, ensuring the embers on the fire were kept low to attract little attention and standing guard, vigilant, as if he was expecting something.

All I can say is, I felt a hell of a lot safer with him around.

When sunrise hit, we all gathered around for something to eat, rationing our supplies carefully, we had no idea how long we were going to be out here, so we had to be careful.

Mikael told us that we needed to prepare ourselves for what was coming.

"There is army base north-west of here, Stary Sobor. We need to be ready for the worst. The have food, supplies and weapons. We head out at mid day, be ready."

Everyone remaind silent and nodded affirmitavely.

"Aswell, our best chance for survival is to hold up somewhere remote and fortified. Devil's Caste north of Stary Sobor. It is in ruins, but we can change that."

"What do you have in mind?" Jonah said, firmly.

Mikael was surprised by Jonah's eagerness.

"From Stary to Devil's castle, is not long trip. So we make few trips, gather supplies to build fortifications. This is how we survive my friends."

"Sounds good." Jonah and myself said in unison.

Finally, we were organised. We had a plan and a set of goals to accomplish.

Devil's Castle. I read about that place, supposedly haunted by the souls of the men who perished there during the castle's final moments. But it was safe, remote and fortifiable.

Devil's Castle, our new beginning.

Edited April 13, 2013 by IKnowAGhost

[x-tony.f@hotmail.com 4]

Awesome story so far, really something for my new project; Daily DayZ, were every shares their story ( www.dailydayz.com )

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[Shrapnell 92]

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[IKnowAGhost 2]

Awesome story so far, really something for my new project; Daily DayZ, were every shares their story ( www.dailydayz.com )

PS: Site is very new and still in progress

Just finished up the second part then, it's mainly something to occupy myself whilst it's pretty slow at work.

Thanks man :) I checked out the site, I'll definitely upload the full story up there once it's finished.

[x-tony.f@hotmail.com 4]

Just finished up the second part then, it's mainly something to occupy myself whilst it's pretty slow at work.

Thanks man :) I checked out the site, I'll definitely upload the full story up there once it's finished.

That would be great, especially its quite a big story, you will be the first with such big story. Let me know if you have trouble since its still new

[DayzForumer 284]

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PS: Site is very new and still in progress

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[DayzForumer 284]

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[charley-taylor@hotmail.co.uk 39]

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[DayzForumer 284]

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[novogeek 253]

To the OP ... awesome story. Just a word of advise, try to keep your tense consistent throughout the writing process. If you are going to use present tense ... it should b used throughout. Avoid the temptation of switching from present to past and back to present, especially in the dialogue parts.

Definitely a cool read and I am looking forward to the rest.

Keep it up. :)

Some posts for helpful hints regarding tense:

http://kimscraftblog.blogspot.com/2008/12/tense-problems-in-writing-memoir.html

http://www.monash.edu.au/lls/llonline/writing/medicine/psychology/essay-structure/8.xml

http://writingcenter.unc.edu/handouts/verb-tenses/

http://howtowriteshop.loridevoti.com/2013/03/present-tense-vs-past-tense-in-young-adult-novels/

Please see this as constructive criticism. I am enjoying the story regardless, but I though it would be helpful. :)

[PuRe DAYZ 39]

nice work dude keep workin

[Hetstaine 10852]

Not a bad read for a first story dude :thumbsup: Mikael stood out as a character.

I hate to be 'that' person, but check your spelling, i am old school and do not use spell check so i constantly reread and recheck my stories and always find mistakes. Mostly from writing too fast when my story is going through my head faster than an i can get it out through my fingers :) I found your sentence structure a bit awkard as it kept breaking flow, did you copy and paste the story to here ?

keep it up man, we need storytellers :beans: