DayZ rap attempt, feedback?

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Be gentle .. Tell me what you think ? :)

[chakijz 174]

Get a new mic, can't hear shit.

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tweeked and re-recorded,

[MrJewsbury 5]

My suggestions are, put more soul into it. The singing shows a lack of enthusiasm, a good gaming rapper to get hints from is Dan Bull aka Douglby

listen to his articulation.

Edited December 3, 2012 by MrJewsbury

[[email protected] 48]

My suggestions are, put more soul into it. The singing shows a lack of enthusiasm, a good gaming rapper to get hints from is Dan Bull aka Douglby

listen to his articulation.

Thanks :) and yeah kinda insecure there, main reason I made it was jsut for a 15 secc clip in one of my vids as I couldnt use a copyrighted rap .. :) only spent 2 mins o nthe lyrics and a couple mins recording it only 3 times x)